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Based off the feedback from my first two elevator pitches, I only made a couple of changes. The first change was me standing up instead of sitting. The second change was including that my hope for this up and coming app is that it would be free to the public. My video appears to be more professional, however I was unable to locate a friend at the time of recording to get away from my web cam. In the future this is the one thing I would change.
Hey Emmalee,
ReplyDeleteI think this app is a great idea that could make going out safer and save some lives! My question is how is the app going to get this information from a smart phone? Maybe you good link it to a smart watch such as, a fit bit to receive this information! Also instead of reading from a script if you are I find it easier just to talk about the idea and go with the flow it helped me a in my elevator pitch. If you would like to check out my idea on renewable energy using the gym heres the link http://peterphamuf.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no3.html
Hey Emmalee!
ReplyDeleteI love your concern for underage drinking and that you are trying to find a way to make it safer because you know that it is not easy to put a stop to. My only complaint is that you did sound rehearsed in some areas, and you may find it easier to talk about it if you're not trying to remember words. Overall, I love your idea and presentation! Feel free to check out my pitch here : http://ryandoescubing.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-3.html
First off, the lighting in your video is really cool so props on that. (It may just be bad lighting but I like it. One critique I have is to read more naturally. Reading from a script makes it sound very rigid and it doesn't get my heart involved.
ReplyDeleteHere is a link to my blog post!